Interim Presentation Feedback

• Why are you using the audio you've already got? (explain more?)
• Documentary film - is it too straightforward?
• Look at "narrative", maybe montage
• More variety - the wider world
• Don't let the footage/audio you've already shot lock you in
• Good subject - look at the whole mythology of it
• There's so much more
• Look at Tacita Dean's film on Michael Hamburger to get a sense of atmosphere she created
• Atmosphere
• Bring it all together
• Does dad's voice have to be included?
• Bring your viewers in - discomfort etc

I will follow through with these actions when researching and shooting.